Something

Something I wrote just now. No good, but whatever.

Normal day, browsing the internet. Find the writing blog that's so popular among them.See my friends' writings. Read.

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There it is again. Like jumping into a freezing lake. The water rising, slow and black. Turning the blood and breath to ice. The more I read, the faster it rises. I can't move, can't swim, can't fight.

The dark, hissing voice. Her. ' You're not good enough to be part of this. You're not good enough for anything, or anyone. You never were, never will be. Ditch the promise you made, they'd be happier if you did.'

I just nod- mind blank, like a zombie- feeling the icy water reach my neck. She was always right; she'd never lie to me.

I let it close over my head and freeze me. There was no reason to fight it, anyway. Not really.

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Comment by Aimée (Queen of the Amazon) on September 19, 2011 at 10:57pm: Yes, it is good, Shae!

It's more than just 'okay'

In fact, I'd even say

The similes, if I may,

And metaphors that you convey

From quite a pleasant word-array

For I, your reader, on this day.

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Shaelah this was wonderful. I love all the word choice and everything. You're an amazing writer. And I do want to know what happens next. :D

/epiccommentmode

Comment by Jessica (Swamp Chicken) on September 19, 2011 at 9:03pm: Wow. That was really great! Very nicely written, I love all the similes and meanings you put into it! :D

K-Mod Comment by Kevin (UniSeal) on September 19, 2011 at 7:26pm: ... what happens next?! I need to know!